When I write a paper or complete an assignment, I'm very good in thinking things through and attempt to be a perfectionist. I tend to read and re-read things over before I submit a completed assignment. Sometimes it can be nerve wrecking at times because I've been known to re-write things more than just a couple of times on the first draft just because of how unsatisfied I was with the appearance and how I worded things.
I do know I need to work on not being a procrastinator and try to give myself enough time to complete work. I tend to give myself a heavier work load towards the due dates then what it would of been originally if I completed my work at the first notice.
I tend to struggle with creating a persuasive paper that makes sense. I'm not very good at trying to express my opinions intellectually and with plenty of information to support my theories/thesis. I think sometimes I put too much emotion into a persuasive paper and in which can get me to sidetrack in the paper and jumble things around to making my instructor(s) raise a question mark after reading.
I think what I've learned most in this class is how to transition myself from writing one form of an assignment to going completly the opposite way. The first assignment was more narrative and personal. After completing the paper, then the informative assignment arose and in which made me have to change my way of thinking on what I wanted my paper to look like. I had transition myself in sounding more informative and factual in what I had to say instead of expressing feelings and emotions. It took me a minute or two but I think I successfully completed it.
Saturday, June 21, 2008
Monday, June 9, 2008
Polygamy Outrage
I have found it appalling to follow up on the Polygamy story that involves over 400 children, parents and the wrongful teachings of the Fundamentalist Church of Jesus Christ of Latter Day Saints. When I had first read about the raid the protective services had conducted to take away all of the children, I was very disturbed to found out the reasonings behind it all. To find out that girls were forced into underage marriage and to hear of the parents that willing allowed it made me sick to my stomach. I can't believe that a mother would allow her own 13 yr old daughter to say wedding vows to a man that could be old enough to be her father! Let alone say the sacred vows in the eyes of God and to shameless approve of the wrongful marriages.
It states in the article how all of the children were returned to their parents. As much as I would like to rejoice for the parents, I feel disturbed and wonder on how the children feel. Even though their time away from their parents were short, they had enough time to experience the finer things in life such as tv and video games that were considered sinful in their religious world. Many were placed in foster homes and as traumatic of an experience for a child to not have their mother around, I tend to wonder if it actually took a different affect on them. For the older children that are more aware of their surroundings such as the age of 10 yrs old, how do they feel now? I wonder how they feel of being placed in a foster home, experiencing many different things that were't allowed at the sect and then to be placed back into the world that we, as society, frown down upon. I tend to wonder what type of emotional distress have formed and how much of a damage the relationship between the parents and the child has been created. I'm sure more than half of the children are fully aware of how the media has responded about their religion, what may have occured at what they had considered home and maybe have started to question what is right and wrong in God's eyes.
The church's teachings and ways of life have been frowned down upon and considered inhumane and injust. In the typical teachings of the Bible and religion, polygamy is not allowed. The prime example would be the first couple that were known as Adam and Eve. They were the approved Christian couple of 1 man and 1 woman. Not Adam having Eve as his wife, then also Alice, Mary, and Elizabeth. Another example would be Jesus's parents, Mary and John. It never states in the Bible of John having any more wives then Mary and therefore society should live their life as the Bible's examples of a 1 man and 1 woman union.
The media has exploited this tragic story. But have you noticed that most of the time, the stations like CNN or MSNBC talk about the court battles the parents are experiencing or how the parents want their children back? What about the children? Has anyone considered how they truly feel? Has anyone considered if the children even want to go back to their parents and back to the church's teachings? Has anyone considered on how the effect of foster homes are to the children? As much as a child should be with their parents, in this prime example, the parents don't deserve to have their children. For them to allow the many sins of rape, abuse, and forcing children to marry their own blood doesn't show true love and protection. I have an 8yr old daughter. I have NEVER had the desire for my daughter to marry someone thats twice her age when she hits maturity. Heck, I don't even want her to marry until she's at least close to 30 and thats only if she's ready and willing. I think the parents should be ashamed of themselves for allowing so much pain onto these children and to allow the wrong teachings of their religion to take control of their corrective parenting skills. God wants every one to love one another, not to hurt and force upon things against peoples' will.
It states in the article how all of the children were returned to their parents. As much as I would like to rejoice for the parents, I feel disturbed and wonder on how the children feel. Even though their time away from their parents were short, they had enough time to experience the finer things in life such as tv and video games that were considered sinful in their religious world. Many were placed in foster homes and as traumatic of an experience for a child to not have their mother around, I tend to wonder if it actually took a different affect on them. For the older children that are more aware of their surroundings such as the age of 10 yrs old, how do they feel now? I wonder how they feel of being placed in a foster home, experiencing many different things that were't allowed at the sect and then to be placed back into the world that we, as society, frown down upon. I tend to wonder what type of emotional distress have formed and how much of a damage the relationship between the parents and the child has been created. I'm sure more than half of the children are fully aware of how the media has responded about their religion, what may have occured at what they had considered home and maybe have started to question what is right and wrong in God's eyes.
The church's teachings and ways of life have been frowned down upon and considered inhumane and injust. In the typical teachings of the Bible and religion, polygamy is not allowed. The prime example would be the first couple that were known as Adam and Eve. They were the approved Christian couple of 1 man and 1 woman. Not Adam having Eve as his wife, then also Alice, Mary, and Elizabeth. Another example would be Jesus's parents, Mary and John. It never states in the Bible of John having any more wives then Mary and therefore society should live their life as the Bible's examples of a 1 man and 1 woman union.
The media has exploited this tragic story. But have you noticed that most of the time, the stations like CNN or MSNBC talk about the court battles the parents are experiencing or how the parents want their children back? What about the children? Has anyone considered how they truly feel? Has anyone considered if the children even want to go back to their parents and back to the church's teachings? Has anyone considered on how the effect of foster homes are to the children? As much as a child should be with their parents, in this prime example, the parents don't deserve to have their children. For them to allow the many sins of rape, abuse, and forcing children to marry their own blood doesn't show true love and protection. I have an 8yr old daughter. I have NEVER had the desire for my daughter to marry someone thats twice her age when she hits maturity. Heck, I don't even want her to marry until she's at least close to 30 and thats only if she's ready and willing. I think the parents should be ashamed of themselves for allowing so much pain onto these children and to allow the wrong teachings of their religion to take control of their corrective parenting skills. God wants every one to love one another, not to hurt and force upon things against peoples' will.
Reflection on Reflective Assignment
For the first English 131 assignment, I was very interested in the Reflective paper due. I've always enjoyed writing narrative, and descriptive pieces. I think the reason is that as a person communicating to others, I tend to "talk too much" when describing an event, who I've met, or even what I've experienced. I tend to explain things using my 5 senses of what I see,hear,feel, touch, and smell. So when it comes to writing descriptions, it tends to be an easier task to me then other assignments like an informative or argumentative assignments. (sorry, Dave)
For my paper, I reaccured the event of being abandoned from my first adoptive family and the painful experience of being left behind. At first I had problems trying to figure out the best ways of explaining the event. I wondered at first if I should make the paper into an actual story and instead of explaining things, just use dialogues. But when I did my outline, I finally agreed on an approach of being more reflective and "past tense" then to make the paper into a full fledge story. I'm pretty happy with the way I finished it and I like the way I seem to be very expressive with my feelings. My emotions were pretty strong at the time of the event and I wanted the readers to see the pain that I had experienced.One of the comments I had received was someone questioning what the thesis was. He had stated that he didn't find it in the first paragraph. I do want to point out that I did make the thesis pretty clear in one of the last sentences in the first paragraph. I am glad that the readers have commented have all pretty much said the story was interesting and compelling, and in which I hoped to accomplish.
I'm pretty satisfied with the outcome of the paper but I do wish I could of gotten away with writing a little bit more. At first when I had written the story, the paper was about 7 pages long. But with the required amount of pages stated, I had to cut it down to 5. I do feel that I wish I could of made the story longer to explain a few more things and get more into depth. Such as specific things I had experienced from my mother of the abuse she had inflicted on me. Or even talk more about my second adoptive family and how much they had saved me from self destruction. If I was able to write the length that I had desired, I think I would of been 100% satisfied with the over all outcome.
For my paper, I reaccured the event of being abandoned from my first adoptive family and the painful experience of being left behind. At first I had problems trying to figure out the best ways of explaining the event. I wondered at first if I should make the paper into an actual story and instead of explaining things, just use dialogues. But when I did my outline, I finally agreed on an approach of being more reflective and "past tense" then to make the paper into a full fledge story. I'm pretty happy with the way I finished it and I like the way I seem to be very expressive with my feelings. My emotions were pretty strong at the time of the event and I wanted the readers to see the pain that I had experienced.One of the comments I had received was someone questioning what the thesis was. He had stated that he didn't find it in the first paragraph. I do want to point out that I did make the thesis pretty clear in one of the last sentences in the first paragraph. I am glad that the readers have commented have all pretty much said the story was interesting and compelling, and in which I hoped to accomplish.
I'm pretty satisfied with the outcome of the paper but I do wish I could of gotten away with writing a little bit more. At first when I had written the story, the paper was about 7 pages long. But with the required amount of pages stated, I had to cut it down to 5. I do feel that I wish I could of made the story longer to explain a few more things and get more into depth. Such as specific things I had experienced from my mother of the abuse she had inflicted on me. Or even talk more about my second adoptive family and how much they had saved me from self destruction. If I was able to write the length that I had desired, I think I would of been 100% satisfied with the over all outcome.
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